tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post3852051524142431300..comments2024-01-08T14:21:37.465-08:00Comments on Infinite Art Tournament: The Great Don Quixote MashupMichael5000http://www.blogger.com/profile/10148584819327475239noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-81503371164850398822009-11-19T14:48:22.785-08:002009-11-19T14:48:22.785-08:00Now, now. Poetic License is allowed! and you fulf...Now, now. Poetic License is allowed! and you fulfilled it beautifully with the latter part of: "He had the obligatory antique lance in its antique lance-rack, and an ancestor's ancient shield hanging on the wall; he had a skinny old greyhound for racing, and an even skinnier horse for riding." But we have "antique" repeated in the same phrase, with "ancient" following (and "ancestor" already clues us in.) Dicing the meanings finely, "ancient" is older than "antique." (Possibles: aged, obsolete, out-dated, dusty, disused.) Repeating ain't stylish. <br /><br />My quarrel with the village boys bit was this: too much verbiage separating the subject and predicate. If the inserted modifying or explanatory phrase is too long, it's difficult to keep the sense of things. "Just then a village lad delivering the goatherds' provisions arrived to ask, "Do you know what's going on down there?" Either move the phrase or shorten it to promote scansion. <br /><br />Again, though-- I love that you did this. (Oops, Epistemz: too late! I AM the English teacher.)Elainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13195458656221202202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-49603020518205240962009-11-19T07:03:28.958-08:002009-11-19T07:03:28.958-08:00@Elaine: Well, yes, I understand how written langu...<b>@Elaine: Well, yes, I understand how written language works. Many of the sentence-ordering choices were made 500 years ago, though, which is part of what makes it a pretty devious exercise. I remain proud of "fasted on," and have corrected the spelling of "elegant" and patched the typo of "obligatory" for your comfort and convenience.<br /><br />Now: let's see <i>your</i> version!<br /><br />@Epistemz: Thanks, bro. (<i>sniffle</i>)</b>Michael5000https://www.blogger.com/profile/10148584819327475239noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-4447356776450970302009-11-18T23:33:19.863-08:002009-11-18T23:33:19.863-08:00I have to say it: That was awesome; M5000, you sho...I have to say it: That was awesome; M5000, you should clue elaine in before her English teacher marks her down for revoking poetic license.<br /><br />Personally, I thought the use of "fasted" for eating mere "leftovers" was funny, or ironic, or droll, or whatever you wittellectuals say these days. The scraps were so negligible that it was like fasting; and the alliteration with "feast", as you mention, does work <em>good</em>.Epistemz Dialektixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02154360341533079869noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-21909604794534454072009-11-18T01:55:40.187-08:002009-11-18T01:55:40.187-08:00Okay, I have to say it: FASTED is misused; M5000,...Okay, I have to say it: FASTED is misused; M5000, you should clue Ben in before his English teacher marks him down for usage error...<br />and the editor in me can't like some of the sentence order choices. This is why writing is actually work: the reader must be able to grasp the meaning smoothly without having to go back and reread or check. Suggest spellcheck...caricature. I know, I know, I'm an old Fuddy-duddy. <br /><br />What I love, however, is that you did this! (It would be a great assignment for an English class. ) Kept me interested, for sure!Elainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13195458656221202202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-16417989122885498722009-11-17T16:32:29.802-08:002009-11-17T16:32:29.802-08:00@Carto: Quixotic? Moi?
@Mrs.: True. But on the ...<b>@Carto: Quixotic? Moi?<br /><br />@Mrs.: True. But on the other hand, using those details for DQ distracts from the Rennaisance Spain setting.<br /><br />@Ben: I don't know if that's a dictionary-correct use for the word, but I liked the fasted/fasted/feasted rhythm.</b>Michael5000https://www.blogger.com/profile/10148584819327475239noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-47339799817779087962009-11-16T12:57:22.512-08:002009-11-16T12:57:22.512-08:00I don't think I've ever seen the term &quo...I don't think I've ever seen the term "fasted" to describe the only thing one DOES eat.<br /><br />See, you did good and made me smarter.Benhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06415787787176723318noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-86104386252833113012009-11-16T09:34:12.964-08:002009-11-16T09:34:12.964-08:00Ah, but when Cervantes chose those details he didn...Ah, but when Cervantes chose those details he didn't NEED to explain what they signified. If he were writing today, he'd be talking about, I dunno, the ham radio set, the old DeSoto up on blocks in the sideyard. Store-brand mac-n'-cheese, a mocha parfait with extra cream on Sundays.mrs.5000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10779294.post-32282630545357652882009-11-16T04:07:49.303-08:002009-11-16T04:07:49.303-08:00I think Michael5000 tilting at windmills should be...I think Michael5000 tilting at windmills should be your new banner image...Cartophiliachttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09380642357785275377noreply@blogger.com